I think you might be being just a little overly critical here. The mention of his mother driving one of the trucks was a little left field, in that he didn't tie it to anything before or after but in general it's not difficult to follow. And while it could have been a little bit more cohesive but I also didn't get that impression about Margetta Hill from reading this at all, if anything I could empathize with her reaction, kind of like a case in point sort of scenario.
But it's good that you're keeping an eye on them. ;)
Is it just me or does this article have no flow? It sounds like something a 3rd grader would write. Why did Gabe mention Mr. Matthews’ mother, lead us to think the following quote might be from her, and then quote another individual? It once again made me go back and re-read what I had just read, as I was looking for a comment from her since he mentioned her being a participant in election preparations. What was the point of mentioning this detail with no elaboration or quote? As well, I feel bad for Margetta Hill, he made her sound like she is a disgruntled employee....I've seen her before at the office and she was very pleasant to deal with during my visit.